(#) mysteriousgod 2008-11-08An interesting spin on an old concept. Kishimoto- not even considering his abortion of a plot after the three year skip- does tend to gloss over several details others take for granted.
I like your story in the way that it takes things more on a 'week-by-week' basis, rather than 'focal points' like: Childhood, Academy, Graduation, Wave, etc.
Keep your story going strong and steady, don't feel like you need to speed things along to keep interest up.
Overall, for the story I believe you deserve a strong 4.
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