There's a dead man in the Dursley's attic. How did he get there? How did he die? And how much is the exterminator going to charge? Warning: No socially redeeming value here. Just fluff. Note:...
- Amusing. Believable OC and Mr. Dursley is IC.
No big problems in here. Certainly nothing that got in the way of the story.
The N in "Number Four, Privet Drive" is usually capitalized.
"purple faced" should be "purple-faced."
"Never mind" is two words. "Altogether" is one word in this case. "Self-appointed" is a hyphenated word.
- Since I read your roommate's piece, I thought I should read this one, too. Well done. Somehow, I just can't feel sorry for Wormtail going after the peanut butter
Author's responseGood scientific approach to fic reading. I approve! grin And yeah, that peanut butter tooth will get you every time...
(#) black_spot 2006-05-29 11:31:44 AMNice twist. I like the idea of Voldemort not being able to hear very well. Was Harry aware of the dead body - I would have liked to have seen his re-action.
Author's responseHarry was not aware of the body, no. He was away at school. I thought about having him at home, but I kind of wanted to keep this short.
- I enjoyed the story. Thanks for writing it. It's clever and seems entirely IC for Mr. Dursley. The OC exterminator is entirely believable and I enjoyed having you flesh him out and having you tell the story from his perspective. That made it more believable to me.