The end of the story.
(#) red_jacobson 2008-12-19 09:38:24 AMI'm going to try this again; the last time the review got lost.
Nice wrap up, but I would have personally preferred more time spent with Harry Hermione and Luna, and less with Draco and Pansy. I would have like seeing the development of the relationship between the three of them, as well as what happened to some of the other characters.
Also, I may be forgetting something, but Hermione made a comment that she could not have children, but Rose was hers from Pansy, who was the host for James?
(#) FenrisWolf 2008-12-19 04:05:15 PMI agree with Red in that it would've been nice to read a more etailed synopsis of the lives of Harry and his two ladies, especially after Harry and Hermione created their Horcruxes and joined the Immortals. At the very least a scene where Hermione rattles the cages of some of the more misogynistic elements of the Immortals (Think Victorian-era Men Only British clubs).
Be that as it may, this was an excellent tale whose end was a long time coming. Now I'll have to re-read it from the beginning as we wait for the rest of 'The Face in the Pool' to surface.....
- A very nice story. thank you for writing (and posting).
One question: in which house was Jason?
In the begin of the story you suggest it is Ravenclaw: "Ravenclaw, and Orion went into Slytherin," Hermione said with a sniff late that evening.
but later it states he was in Griffindor: Orion Malfoy and Jason Potter had been Sorted into Slytherin and Gryffindor respectively.
- Good wrap up, though I'll agree with Red and Fenris about wishing for more of Harry, Hermione, and Luna. In any case, 'tis a most excellent tale that will clearly bear re-reading in the future.
Thank you for taking the time to properly finish and wrap up the story.
- Pleased to see the Malfoys get their just desserts, even if Harry and Hermione seemed to be a little cold-blooded about it. That's probably just because I've lost the momentum (and rage!) of this epilogues antecedents.
The idea of the Malfoys being kept 'on remittance' was a clever one, new to me and a nice, acceptable measure between outright expulsion or incarceration.
Why the need for multiple horcruxes? Since it seems proven that just one will suffice - viz Hermione's sole soul jar - why did Harry feel the need to make three? Particularly since I think this story supported the notion that too many horcruxes reduced the character or humanity of the immortal?
From Hermione's little speech to Pansy I thought she was going to 'magically return the poison' and kill her but only 'before [she] is in too much pain'. Yet Hermione seemed to kill her immediately ... not even five minutes of Pansy "feeling the effects of a foreign poison entering her body", say.
Luna's offer to Hermione shocked me, slightly. It was something I hadn't expected, connected nicely to Hermione's prior observation to Pansy about the restrictions on horcruxes for herself, and a great little thing to add. Very good.
Although I find myself wondering why Luna - why anyone - wouldn't want to be immortal. Would decide that their 'season' should be shorter than what it could be.
Thank you for completing your story.
Author's responseLuna is allowing nature to take its course, rather than artificially lengthening it. Most of the brotherhood kept 3 horcruxes, it was with 4 that their humanity started slipping away. Afterall, it's good to have insurence. Hermione is just limited in her choices