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If He Dies Before I Wake...
7 ReviewsThe doctor's verdict on Gerard's condition
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(#) canustakemyheart 2008-12-24 03:50:00 AM
I'm really diggin' this story. You've really built up the suspense here in a believable way. And I think you're doing a good job with the characterization and dialog. I loved the nurse talking to Mikey ... and the news person at the end was spot on.
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(#) canustakemyheart 2008-12-24 03:52:18 AM
Ok, you might get two posts on this because ficwad is sucking right now.
Anyway, here's what I think I said the first time ...
I'm digging this story. You're doing great with the suspense, characterization and dialog. I loved the nurse talking with Mikey and the news cast at the end was spot on.
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(#) iwillstakeyourheart 2008-12-24 02:31:54 PM
canustakemyheart told me I should read this one. I like it. It's nice to see a story with drama, and action and emotion that has nothing to do with "teenagers in love in high school" (yeah - not really into reading that type of stuff!). And of course, I gravitate towards, "the dark side" as well so I love a story where it's very possible that everything does not turn out "ok".
I like your dialog too.
Keep it up!
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(#) disturbedangel6 2008-12-24 10:00:17 PM
Yay this is so good!
I love it
And poor gerard
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(#) rocker4lifeSAM 2008-12-25 04:37:06 PM
sorry i didnt review earlier.
this story is heading off to a great start i really like it!
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(#) Sassy 2009-02-01 07:19:07 AM
Everything feels so real. As I read I'm feeling everything myself - I feel quite drained at the moment.
Just so good!
Sas x -
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(#) _Amy_Revenge_ 2009-06-04 11:52:15 PM
I am so hooked on this now... so you better hope it takes me a while to read...or that I don't get hungry and decide to eat you o_O L O L Just kidding XD
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