There's big trouble on the mission while Kim waits for Ron to wake up! More of Kim's family shows up. The portal is still mysteriously watching everything.
- I really like this story. However, perhaps you should make a new paragraph every time some else talks. It would make it easier to read. Other than that the story is pretty well written.
Author's responseThanks for your suggestion and I'm glad you like this story. I hope you'll come back and read the rest of the chapters! :)