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Waiting

by TheDarkestStar 1 Reviews

Dash takes protecting people to far when he gets a power that has been lock inside him for some time will he risk he life for his family or doom The Incredilbes to their death

Category: Incredibles - Rating: R - Genres: Action/Adventure, Horror - Characters: Dash Parr, Elastigirl (Helen Parr), Mr. Incredible (Bob Parr), Violet Parr - Warnings: [V] - Published: 2006/03/24 - Updated: 2006/03/24 - 1099 words

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  • The Incredible Change

    (#) Ithilwen 2006-03-24 03:25:54 PM

    A run through spellchecker would do this chapter some good.

    So far this story is okay as a scriptfic, but you might want to look up some playwrighting style manuals. It might help you describe your scenes.

    Just call him "Jimmy" from the start.



    Author\'s Response: spell checker is one thing i dont have on my hard drive but i'll see what i can do thanks again ^_^

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