Paul Kemp overhears a conversation, Harry, Hermione and the sprogs go visit Gramama. If this were Star Trek, Paul would be wearing a red shirt. Sorry buddy. . .
(#) Wonderbee31 2009-03-14 06:36:28 PMA shame about Paul there, as he was just someone who got caught up at the wrong place and time, but still unsure who it is, but have aguess. Enjoyed the day out they all had, and have to wonder how much fury there might be when Harry and Hermione finally realize their feelings for each other, and the problems this might cause with other sheep in the wizarding world?
Author's responseWow, if there's a contest for fastest review, then you win! I think I posted this story less than an hour ago.
Yeah, I hated to lose Paul, but there wasn't a whole lot more he could accomplish in the story.
There will be fallout for Harry and Hermione when they do finally realize they're meant for each other, remember, the wizarding world is still somewhat Victorian in their attitudes.
Rest assured, they WILL get together.
- Thank you for the quick update, this part is new.
I re-read the original by Guitargurl and I like the changes you have made.
Perfesser, what are you doing? Are you Cormac McCarthy, who writes interesting characters only to kill them off? What did Mr. Kemp ever do to you?
You say it's an important clue to solving the case for Harry, and I'll trust you - this time!
Nice 'slice of life' depiction with the children on the way to grand mum's house.
My own daugher could burp as loud as her father when she was four - they would laugh and I had to be the Mommy. No fair.
Gule gule, arkadashim
the next review is the response to your review, I'm a little tired and I thought I was responding to what you had written, but I goofed.
(#) PerfesserN 2009-03-14 06:45:46 PMWhoa, fast review, I just posted this earlier this evening.
Tatlim, I like it that you don't like everything I do in a story. If all I wanted was positive feedback then I would only write for my immediate family.
Paul's death will help, that's all I'll say for now.
Because you wrote in Turkish, I'll respond,
- Great chapter, i cant wait to seem what happens in the next set, I have been checking it daily for updates. I also really like that there is a good amount of Lightheartedness in the story, it is needed after a death, it makes the story a lot more believable with the showing of human emotion. Anyways i look forward to the next chapter.
Author's responseThanx for reading and reviewing - this was a 'slice of life' for Harry and Hermione and family, but defiantly a "Twilight Zone" moment for poor Paul.
I average one update per week, sometimes, like this week, two.
(#) FroggyPrince 2009-03-15 11:20:56 AMReading your fictions feels so genuine. Your characterizations are so spot-on, it feels like visiting old friends, the way they should have been written in canon. Harry is not super, not perfect, he has his flaws, and Hermione has her flaws as well - her sin is pride.
Looking forward to watching these two go forward.
Furthermore, maybe getting a bit forward with each other already.
Please update often.
Author's responseThank you for reading, and reviewing and for your kind words of encouragement.
"Visiting with old friends" is exactly how I feel when I read a skilfully crafted fan fiction. High praise indeed.
- Now that was a very interesting chapter. I do feel sorry for Paul, but sometimes you just end up in the wrong place/time. I found it interesting that he did see the Knight Bus and I wonder if he had magical potential or if that was a side effect of the cog's control; in any case, that's a moot point now with his death. I can see how the evidence surrounding his death will help resolve the case. Meanwhile, i loved the "slice of life" vignette of taking the kids to go see Grandmum Molly; I'm sure they enjoyed it and I'm equally sure that it and the news helped Molly.
Now, when Harry & Hermione realize that they do belong together, it should be interesting to see if they're considered by wizarding society to have mourned enough for their respective spouses to move on with their lives (I'd reckon that a lot of folk will find some reason to object, not that any of them will be listened to by Harry & Hermione). I'm not sure if it's just a particular cog behind this or if there are wizarding perps active, too, as I can make arguements both ways. It should be rather interesting to see where this leads.
Author's responseThank you, as always, for reading and reviewing.
Paul was able to see the Knight Bus because of the cog’s influence, and yes, tragic as it was, Paul’s death will be the turning point in the investigation.
In my version of the wizard-centric world, a widow is supposed to mourn for a year and a day, there might be a loophole though. . .
As to who’s the brains behind the cogs?
Wait for it. . .