(#) DragonBard 2009-03-23Might want to describe her hair as something besides cinnamon. I thought you were talking about Ginny when you wrote that.
Author's responseI dunno...I've always seen cinnamon as a medium to light brown. Ginny's hair is the vibrant reddish orange, called 'Weasley Red'.
- Y'know, this is a completely average "Harry Gets A Clue About Hermione" story in almost every respect. BTW - I do like your portrayal of Hermione being more incisive and daring than Harry when it comes to romance. It is something that is very in-character.
However, what really makes this story stand out, what earns it its 'Original' rating from me, is that you make Ron out to be a normal boy with honest feelings. Too often in H/Hr, Ron is portrayed as some kind of predator only interseted in Hermione because he wants something of Harry's or simply because he wants a 'shag'. Here you show a Ron with genuine feelings for Hermione but has been forced to deal with the fact that she belongs to someone else. After all, if you really love someone, you have to be willing to let them go.
Author's responseThank you...I think. Yes, it s rather lukewarm, but this is actually one of the very first HP stories I'd written. I've always seen Hermione as a strong and determined young lady. She sees something wrong and tries to fix it.
When I wrote it I did not dislike Ron as much as I do now. Even now,I sometimes limit the Ron-bashing, although I usually see him as like a pro ball player. He sees the candy and goes out to get it, assuming nobody else sees him doing it.
As a teenager, I was in love with a lot of girls, none of which were in love with me. So Ron's decision is actually mine.
I'm working on a long Azkaban fic where Ron isn't such a shallow prick.
- Very moving... personally this Is another of those fics that I've come to class as the "We Wish It Were Canon" fics there aren't many of them on my personal list, but this chap has made it.
Author's responseThank you, Basilisk.
That level of praise is rare and so, I appreciate every drop.
You are absolutely correct. Rowling's portrayal of the emotions of teenagers is shallow and two-dimensional. Even T H White did a better job with Arthur...and that's not saying a hell of a lot.
Thanks for the kudos.
- i can see multiple explanations for cannon dumbledor cold manipulative bastard kindly eccentric old man other things
Author's responseRowling intended Dumbledore to be the all-knowing all-powerful wizard, who truly had everyone’s best interests at heart. However, she apparently had no real knowledge of psychology, or she would have researched his character more fully. I have seen him portrayed as many things, like you said, from kindly but misguided, to evil incarnate. Personally, I refer him to…as Lilo said to Stitch, “have a medium high level of badness.” This is, by no means, the worst I’ve written him.
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