(#) Admonkeystrator 2009-04-06It seems to be going quite well, without too much focus on the cliche that seems to be attached to sirius-will, helpful-goblin type fics, but they are there and I almost cringe whenever they are mentioned.
As far as the character interaction goes - while i've seen better, I have most certainly seen alot more, be much much worse - so well done
Ron looks to be maintaining his jealousy and resentment towards Harry - something I admit I enjoy, he's such an arse. At the same time I notice that Ginny still has her crush yes? Pity, that's a waste of a character imo. She has potential to be so much more then just another fangirl...whether one agrees with JK's choices or not.
Is it finished on the lemon? if so, pity - romance doesn't end in the bedroom, but rather begins there.
Author's responseThank you for the review, while i know i have quite a few cliches in the story it's just the way i wanted to write it. Ron will most likely continue to be jealous. ginny i'm not sure what to do with at this point. There will be much more romance between Harry and Tonks, it's a love story more than anything else. I mean it did take me ten chapters to get them to have sex. There will be many more tender moments between them. Thanks again for the review.
- Reckon Severus got what he's so richly earned. 'Twill be interesting to see the reactions of Ginny, Hermione, and Luna to the fact that Harry and Tonks are an intimate "item". 'Twill also be quite educational to see what actions Dumbles takes in response to what happened this night.
(#) thmanwithnoname 2009-05-04I just finished reading through your story, and I really do enjoy it. Honks stories are among my favourites. My only real issue is the cliched 'real form' part of the last chapter, and that's more that I've seen it so many times, and become rather tired of it, not that you wrote it badly.
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