what happens when Lily and James abandon their son because they thought he was a squib, what happens if a business associate from America, Tony Stark finds an abused Harry after a business event at...
(#) Nautilus 2009-06-03 12:15:57 AM
great looking forward to more,
harry inherited tony's personality or has pepper had a hand in raising harry as well..
looking forward to more.
(#) jabarber69 2009-06-03 12:22:04 AM
Nice start, interesting ideal but I do beleive clell65619 already beat you to the harry adopted by tony stark but at least in that story the dursleys abandoned hp, so definitely gonna be checking out your story...
(#) DarQuing 2009-06-03 12:22:25 AM
I think you should continue it. It has an interesting opening and I look forward to your take on a Harry Potter/Ironman cross-over. :)
(#) Rob 2009-06-03 12:22:39 AM
It was going pretty good till the fainting thing. How often does a healthy young guy faint?
(#) fic_reader1 2009-06-03 12:35:29 AM
it was to short to say if it is going to be good or bad but it could be interesting
(#) steve2668 2009-06-03 12:42:07 AM
So far so good, Looking foreward to more.
(#) phpp 2009-06-03 03:02:16 AM
i found it short but good, to soon to say if its a good story, but hopful
Interesting start. Just keep writing and see where it goes.
(#) Qellar 2009-06-03 04:33:25 AM
Sounds interesting, however there is already a similiar storyline Harry Potter and The Invincible Technomage
Your storyline better be different then one written by Clell65619 or you might get in trouble. :)
(#) rb8 2009-06-03 04:33:41 AM
Nice writing, but you'll have to really make your story different from Clell's if you want to succeed. My opinion: Harry needs some kind of character flaw, it's not too fun to read about a hero who's practically perfect in every way.