- Odd chapter order, but you're not the first one to have that happen to your story on this site.
Lovely chapter though, no matter the number. There was just one thing...
I believe in seven impossible things before breakfast without breaking a sweat, but believing in a world where poodles are taken seriously is very, very difficult.
Well done. I laughed several pounds off my arse.
The ACME-approach to occlumency was brilliant. The ending cliffie, not so much. It felt a bit cheap and i know you can do better.
That said: Three pounds of polish marshmallows to you! Thanks.
- Harry should, maybe team with Slyvia to get back at Paddy and Moonie. With the use of a boggart and the redikulas spell Harry could cause the boggart take the shape of Paddy dressed as a S&M submissive. Photograph the scene and release the photo to the media, under the premise of 'The Fugitive paddy Black' seen here. As for Moonie, Snape could alter the wolfsbane potion so that every time she transforms, she is either besieged by biting fleas or she suffers an unbearable itch. Fair is fair and that would be.
(#) Quackpotty 2009-10-19Ouch about the usual ficwad stuffup. I read most of this story on my mobile phone, so I didn't notice the mess until I was thrust into a crazy chapter with no idea what was going on. Oh well, I got it sorted in the end. Thanks for the awesome story so far and I eagerly await more from this story. It's very well thought out, and you only have a few places where there are mistakes for the gender problem. One of those places (where it happened the most times I can remember) was on the train to Hogwarts where you mixed up Ron/Ronnie a couple times and used his/he rather than her/she. This is still very well done, and a massive planning undertaking, so I salute you.
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