(#) Lord_Frodo 2009-10-26Interesting, very interesting.
I don't believe O have ever encountered a story with this particular crossover.
if you do it well it will be excellent and so far I am enjoying it.
a few minor things, use some sort of spell check to catch some errors, and split scenes and POV changes a bit more obviously.
hope you continue to write this.
(#) zackseawolf 2009-10-31It has a lot of potential, there are some minor issues that a beta could probably work out for you. Your writing is very eloquent, but you kinda skim over a lot of things that would make the story more understandable. Other than that and a few other minor flaws it has the makings of a great fanfic! keep it up
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