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Perfect Blood

by Qem 2 Reviews

Written for IYFlashfic August; requested pairing Hojo/Myouga. A semi-serious attempt at crack, with a tendency to get caught up in pointless moments. Flea demons can get just about everywhere.

Category: Inuyasha - Rating: R - Genres: Humor - Characters: Other - Published: 2006/04/16 - Updated: 2006/04/17 - 2519 words - Complete

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  • Perfect Blood

    (#) Ithilwen 2006-04-20 06:01:50 PM

    You have a lot of unnecessary commas in here. A lot of minor tense problems. A good grammar beta could clean this up a bit, but it's nothing dealbreaking.

    You overuse the word "individual" as Myouga describes Yash's blood.

    A "youkai" is a demon. A demon's aura is "youki."

    Kagome "flaunts," not "vaunts."

    "Baths, showers, mint;"

    !! Have him use one of the skin remedies that he'd found for Kagome!

    "It was obviously gremlins."

    (snork)
  • Perfect Blood

    (#) kirayasha 2007-02-20 06:50:23 PM

    laughs I loved Myouga's lil time spent with Hojo! laughs

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