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Finding family and differences.

First meetings take place and both Harry and Hermione make their first decisions.

Category: Harry Potter - Rating: PG-13 - Genres: Fantasy - Characters: Harry,Hermione - Warnings: [?] - Published: 2010/02/13 - Updated: 2010/02/14 - 4067 words

Reviews

• Portals, Steam and Magic

  (#) Cateagle 2010-02-14 08:08:56 AM

  The new version of the story has some nicely done expansions that render the story more readable and comprehensible, but there's still enough problems with homonyms and near homonyms to shake the reader's trance while reading the chapter. It's going to be very interesting to see where these decisions take by Hermione and Harry; i daresay they'll both go places that Dumbles would never have wanted them to go. Speaking of the bearded old manipulator, I rather like the approach Harry took with him, it's so much more satisfying to personally deliver retribution as well as being the last form of attack that Albus would expect; then again, his treatment, or lack thereof, of Hermione's safety earned such a thrashing.

• Portals, Steam and Magic

  (#) adrianbdean 2010-02-14 09:18:55 AM

  I liked the old story better.
  
  You need to go over your grammar, spelling, and punctuation. Any screw ups, and there are a few, make this story hard to read and follow.
  
  I like your ideas though and look forward to more

• Portals, Steam and Magic

  (#) ficbob 2010-02-16 08:09:12 AM

  Thanks. Hoping for more.

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