- Definitely an interesting chapter. I quite liked the meeting with Hedwig as well as the pensive encounter with his parents. I'm certain both will go a long way toward helping him to his destiny. Meanwhile, the most manipulative Albus is finding reality confounding his plans and 'twill be interesting to see how much furthre they get confounded and how much damage gets done to them. Already by this point there've been enough changes to Harry that oblivating him and sending him back likely won't work.
Author's responseI will say that eventually Dumbledore is going to get massively grumpy with Harry because no matter what Dumbledore tries to do Harry just turns the tables on him.
He'll be tearing out his beard in a while, if I have any say in the matter. As its my fic, I most certainly DO!
- Wow you sure are talented. This story drew me in wanting more.
And that is what most good writers do.
Even if you write for yourself if you can do this then you are doing something right!
Can't wait for more!
Author's responsethank you both for the review and the compliment about my writing ability :)
- Thanks for the new chapter!
I'll guess that the four girls also shared (and will share) this dream... Now, I have the feeling that it will be by recognizing Hedwig that the girls will come to Harry...
Oh! And thanks, but I prefer to try and guess the girls identity: if funnier this way :-D
(I've read only the first book, so I don't know (or remember) the "official" hair colors for each of the characters...)
Now for the guesses, Susan Bones is often described as a red-head (but not always, so...) and I would guess that the last one is a Slytherin... In half of the fics I've read, she have black hair, and the rest of the time, blonde, but I kind of like Daphnée Greengrass (OK... It's more her first name that I like, but, hey!)
Please, update soon!
Author's responsethe way I have it planned is that the girls will have no idea for the moment (as the ones with wizard parents among them will most likely tell their parents who could probably work out the identity of the male pretty quickly), but as soon as they lay eyes on Harry they will (as I have decided to set it) get a strange feeling of knowing him and briefly see the dream image of flying in their minds.
the girls will not recognize Hedwig as a result, but they will feel an inexplicable attraction to Harry all the same. From then it's only a matter of how long they hold out against it. I may implement the "recognizes Hedwig" idea for one girl though, and I have the perfect idea for who it is....
you are indeed correct, Susan is the redhead and Daphne is the black-haired girl. The blonde and brunette are probably kind of obvious :)
thanks for the review!
(#) ROBERT_1958 2010-07-04Ilike the Idea of Harry having his parants around, even if they are only copies, at least Harry can know them and share ideas with them.
I am glad Harry finly got Hedwig.
Author's responsetechnically, they're now completely up-to-date versions of Harry's parents. they were updated up until the day they were both killed, then Harry filled them in on all that had happened since.
- Your story is interesting and, for the most part decently written.
You do, however, have a problem with usage of "who" and "whom." Try replacing "who" with "he" and "whom" with "him"; if the sentence no longer makes sense, you've used the wrong one; e.g. "whom sat" becomes "him sat" and is obviously incorrect, and so, "who" is the form you need.
Keep up the good work. I look forward to reading further chapters.
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