(#) Kid_Vicous 2011-04-05 11:00:57 AMPretty good writing. But pay attention to speech marks and new lines for dialogue. You seem to skip them sometimes. It irritates me.
Anyway, interesting story idea. You have my attention. Run with it.
Author's responseIm glad you like it and the marks....I put them in when I write them in but when I post they don't show. I wish I knew why Ficwad hates me :(