(#) Darkmark66 2011-06-01Very good I never liked Albus him bashed is always good and after that line about Harry coming out from his cuboard I just wanted Harry to punch or kill him. I thought Albus did more harm to Harry than the Dark Lord who wanted Harry dead Albus wanted him to suffer then die when the time was right.
I hope the Weasley's get bashed a bit too as they are blind followers of Albus and I hate Ron.
A great twist for the Head of the Black family.
Firenze was a really nice idea.
I hope the Dursley's suffer.
I look forward to what will happen next.
- Good start, clearly you want Hermione close to Harry and the hints are there as to how close. Kitty's a good ACC but fill out her background more as you go.
I can already see Dumbles try to get things his way but "Madam" Bones, Head of the DMLE should be able to handle him! Oh and remember Luna Lovegood's a good catalytic character! Use here here to help Harry!
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