(#) DeathCookie 2011-07-19AYY, BUT IT'S THE GOOD KIND OF CHEESE! :D To be honest, it wasn't the least bit overly fluffy..it totally would have been if you would have written Gerard's dialogue more like this:
"...I've been so madly in love with you since the moment I first lay eyes on you, I knew you had to be mine..Meet me at the lake, let me ravish you"
and then Frank would come in and confess his love for her too, ahah!
Seriously, though, you're great..stop doubting your work so much! There's always room for improvement with everyone's writing, but you've really tackled these chapters head on!
Love it! Please update soon!
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