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Seventeen

by BandiitMarie 5 Reviews

"You need to be a man Gerard. You need to fight back."

Category: My Chemical Romance - Rating: R - Genres: Angst,Drama,Horror - Characters: Gerard Way - Warnings: [V] - Published: 2011/08/05 - Updated: 2011/08/05 - 1093 words

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  • The Poison

    (#) shortygirl 2011-08-05 12:33:50 PM

    Well i can see why gerard is so screwed up in the head..i kinda feel bad for him..though what he is doing isn't right either...
  • The Poison

    (#) japulapu 2011-08-05 09:48:33 PM

    I kind of find both their situations similar. But the difference is that Gerard is messing with Alyn's head directly and Gerard's dad was causing more or less the same impression, except in the a more violent form. And I also guess that in the beginning Gerard might have took pity on his father, who was after all his father. But then obvioulsy, he changed his mind. But like you mentioned in the previous story, Alyn reminds Gee of himself. I'm glad you updated. Take it slow, don't rush yourself or it won't turn out well. Brilliant writing as usual.It's so good that you actually take pity on the man who has done so much evil. Quite convincing. Have you ever taken up debating?

    Author's response

    Actually I never really picked up debating, I am more of showing both sides equally, like with this I want to show Gerard in both his vulnerable, and his psychotic nature. Some might find it drawn out but I want them to get the full picture of Gerard's character. Alyn though, she's becoming harder to write for me. I put alot if my own feelings in here about the characters. When Gerard says Alyn's act us old and stale, but hoping she can bring something new to the table. I really find Alyn's character is stuck in a rut. So I'm trying to develop Gerard, the complex character, more so that it sort if compensates fir Alyn being stale. Mikey's a whole other ball game, he's someone I need to develop more as well. Sorry for telling you all this, I just know you understand writing well, and I feel like I can tell you. Maybe you have some ideas?
  • The Poison

    (#) japulapu 2011-08-07 01:17:25 AM

    Well, if you're stuck in a rut, there isn't much you can do. It's a good idea to bring out Gerard's character. I understand if you want to bring out the characters well, it's probably important for the ending. Personally, I feel Gerard's character is even more dangerous because he is vulnerable. As for Mikey, he seems like he's strong, yet he can really open up his heart. He can control when he wants to but isn't like commanding. I guess he will be hard, because he doesn't have any prominent features, like Gerard, who's like you said, psychotic. But then again Gerard is also tough because of his mix. But I personally would find Mikey a little harder because he's normal. As for Alyn, I suggest you should pick one direction to travel in. If you want you can continue for a while with mixed feelings, but eventually you will have to pick a certain emotion or demeanour to associate with her. But don't let it on too soon. Write the emergence of a new feeling for her slowly, so that that major feeling collides with the end. It would leave an impact. You can go back and read all your previous chapters to re-study Alyn. I’m going to say it again, don’t rush yourself, write it slowly and at ease. Then again if you are like me and prefer to write under a time limit, you might want to set a time to write. Don’t write if you don’t adore your idea. That’s what I go by when I write. It shouldn’t be strained or forced. Let it come naturally. If you can associate something that happened to you or someone you know to this, you can write that as well. It’s up to you. You could even create a crazy climax, a mad, shock ending. This is just advice. You can of course pick an entirely new thing and surprise us all. As for the rut, take some time off to just read, it helps.
  • The Poison

    (#) japulapu 2011-09-06 11:58:36 PM

    Hey, it's been a while since you posted anything. I was wondering if everything was ok. Hope to see you soon.
  • The Poison

    (#) MrsWayBeckett 2012-05-26 05:53:35 PM

    This story is AMAZING!! :D pleeeeeeease update soon!

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