Gerard and Mikey go meet up with Frank and Ray at Frank's house. More flashbacks...
(#) -TheGhostOfYou- 2011-08-15 08:05:31 PMI actually like this story, it's got a pretty cool storyline. I do have one question though, in the first summary it says that Gerard was a teenager facing these reoccurring flashbacks, and then in this chapter it said something about the 'tour ending'. So are they famous in this story, or no? Just curious. But anyway, keep up the good work!
Author's responseThanks... And yes, they are famous. Sorry if I did not make myself very clear. I may have made a typo.
- This is a really interesting plot, but to be honest I don't like your writing style. The pacing isn't very good, or the vocabulary. Some of the reactions are a bit out of character too, and some of the sentences don't make much sense.
By all means, continue, this is a very interesting plot. But maybe get a beta to help you with some of the little things?