(#) paradoxicalcynic 2011-09-10 04:30:41 PMAwesome plot! And your story is certainly entertaining :)
I don't have any rating points so I can't rate this, grrr!
Anyway, just a suggestion: you might want to make the chapters longer (800 - 1000 words).
Many people find longer chapters more worth rating; because more goes on in 1000 words than 200 words, so you have more to rate by :)
Really enjoyed this!! Update soon :D