well this is the first chapter where gerard is directly involved!!!! yaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaayy!!!!!!!!!!!!
- hi i was just wondering... are you obsessed with gerard or something because this story has no credible plot whatsoever. i can understand if you wanted to finish that part quickly because i have done a bad part in a story myself just to get it over with but i cant imagine gerard going online, meeting some girl and suddenly falling in love with her. it makes no sense to me. the basic idea behind this fic could be a good story but you need to take some more time with your work and expand it. e.g you could have a chapter where gerard is talking about his artwork or his comic or something. i am sorry if im flaming you a little but i do believe that you have potential as a writer.