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The Boy Who Won

by jempa1112 2 Reviews

Harry's thoughts and actions after the death of You-Know-Who. Mentions of death..my first ever fic, so reviews both good and bad are welcome, as well as tips.

Category: Harry Potter - Rating: PG - Genres: Angst - Characters: Dumbledore,Harry,Hermione,Ron - Warnings: [!!] - Published: 2011/10/16 - Updated: 2011/10/16 - 665 words - Complete

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  • The Boy Who Won

    (#) dhampirkinfolk 2011-10-16 02:58:56 PM

    It was...eh. Your writing is pretty good, but you should go back and try to fix the mistakes that the spellchecker missed. Agreed instead of agree, invisibility coat instead of cloak. Things like that. Next time, try for something with a little more substance to it. We want to read a steak sandwich, not lettuce on Melba toast.

    Author's response

    Thanks for your review. Like i said it was a first try and i really appreciate your advice. I went back and fixed the spelling mistake - thanks for pointing them out to me..Thanks a lot..
  • The Boy Who Won

    (#) daemonx 2011-10-17 05:11:25 AM

    It was decent enough from a technical stand-point. Far too short and something that's been done to death, though. I'd rate it Cliche and move on.

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