After introducting the new Bakura to Yugi and Yami, Ryou is ready to settle into his new life with Bakura. But some unwelcome news may postpone his happily ever after, after all!
(#) jensti 2006-08-12 03:35:46 AMThat was great! I was almost put off starting this story by how long it was but then got into it and was only too happy to find chapter after chapter. Your writing style is really nice and you capture the personailty and the language of all the characters really well. I thought your humour was good (your smut in the steam story was also pretty enjoyable!) and I don't think you have any reason to put yourself down about it. I was smiling throughout the scenes with Shego and Drakken. I also loved the way that Kim's mission was seen through the eyes of Ryou and Bakura who have no idea who she and Ron are. Basically I loved it, thanks for the entertainment and, if you feel like it, I would appreciate it if you would take a look at my first offering 'The Lift' it involves Mai and Seto, which I'm guessing isn't really your thing (!) but, as it's my first effort I could do with some pointers / feedback.
- I love this! I want to see Kim Possible so badly, now: I never did, but I could still follow (and I have seen the sort of cartoons, I guess); I loved the evil genius! g
The part with Yugi and Yami at the very end was a bit... fanon, I think? I’m saying this because even though I liked it (because... heh. Serves Yami right!) and there’s a good reason for it here, it made me stop and think “okay, I have seen this before, and not in the original source”. (not trying to be rude or anything).
The scene in which Ryou and Bakura ‘discover’ each other is amazing: the whole romance is beautiful, never overdone, not even the main focus, and yet (and because of it) very touching and romantic.
I can’t believe you had it end like that though! Shego is evil – and funny: her interaction with both Ryou and Bakura was great!