"But I do want to date him. Even more than I did back in that hell called high school." Read, review, rate and feel my love :P
(#) tortillachip 2011-11-29 04:27:22 PMThis was wonderful!! I'm sorry to hear about your bad day. You seem like the kind of person that deserves the absolute best. Anyway, this chapter was really interesting. I liked the way it cam together. It really flowed well and provoked great imagery. Gerard just keeps messing everything up. It's fine to be angry that this kid that's known Mikey for about a day knows exactly what he needs and how he should be dealt with and what he feels and what he thinks, but don't say such stupid things about Mikey. It's not Mikey's fault that Frank is the way he is, caring and willing to help. You should know that Gerard. Gerard's a good person in this story, but he really just doesn't know how to control his emotions, and when he's angry or whatever, things just come tumbling out, even if he doesn't mean them. Well, not really anyway. I also like the humor in this chapter before it got to the serious part. The change surprised you, but it wasn't out of the blue. This is what I was saying about the flow. Also, I really like the last part. Gerard wants Mikey to care about him, love him again, but here he is insulting him about the one thing he dislikes about himself. Great job, Gerard. I really mean it. I also like the kiss. It was well described and Iove how you describe why he felt. It was extremely well done. I love everything about this chapter. It was well written and beautiful and just amazing. Also, I really like that adorably amazing switch off line. It was very clever, just like the rest of this story. I have this quick little story. I was searching this site and I saw someone named DisenchantedDestroya. I was like " how could this be?" and I was wonderig about it for a while until I saw your username. I hadn't noticed it before. Well yeah. That is all. Sorry for the length and hope you have a better day tomorrow.
Author's responseThank you very much; your review has brightened my day!
I'm really glad that you liked this, I really thought that it was on the crappy side. Gerard is meant to come across as a good person in this, just a little confuddled and short tempered; just like you said. I was worried that people would ineterperate this chapter as Gerard just being nasty when it really wasn't meant to porttray that; just that his want to help Mikey and frustration that Frank had gotten further in a day than he has in years. Again, just like you said.
I'm pleased that you liked the humour, as a general rule I suck at making things light-hearted, so to hear that you liked that aspect of it is really encouraging.
About the kiss; I've never actually kissed anyone before, so I'm relieved that you think it sounds alright!
I kinda have a little story about the name thing too. When I signed up I was in such a hurry that I made a typo in my username; great start on a website that's about writing!
Don't apologize about leaving a long review; I always love Reading reviews. The more there is to read the better!
I've got the day off tomorrow because teachers are striking, so I'm sure that it'll be better, thanks.
Thank soooo much for taking the time to review! :)
(#) tortillachip 2011-11-29 04:32:01 PMSorry for commenting again, but I just wanted to let you know you posted this chapter twice. Now I have an excuse to reread it, not that I needed one anyway. Also, about your username, I meant that I didnt pay close enough attention to he spelling of your name.
Author's responseThanks for telling me about the chapter thing; I appreciate it! Thanks! :)
(#) youcanstakemyheart 2011-11-29 06:51:48 PMfirst off, sorry your day way sucky. mine was too. life's a bitch :P anyway! you're a REALLY good writer, and your stuff is really deep. It's so sad! stupid gerard, not controlling his temper and saying all the wrong stuff at the perfectly wrong time. finally: IT'S A CLIFFHANGER?!?! OH..YOU FEMALE DOG :)
Author's responseSorry that your day was sucky too. To quote the almighty Green Day; "Life's a bitch and so am I, the world owes me so fuck you!" (it's what I try to think whenever someone annoys me/is mean) :P
Thank you very much for such a nice review; I'm really chuffed that you liked it!
I agree completely with you statement; VERY stupid Gerard!
Thank you very much for taking the time to be so nice about the trash I write; it means a lot! Thanks for reviewing! :)
- OH WOW OH MY GOSH OOOOOOOOOOOO POOR MIKEY OH MY.
Gerard's words just come up like word vomit oh no nonononoononnononoononononononononononoonnoooooooo. but oh my gosh he did not need to say that wow poor all of them; Gee is messed up, Mikey is jumbled up and scarred, and Frank just probably got his heart ripped out oh lord this is not good.
GERARD! GO SAVE YOUR RELATIONSHIP WITH YO BRO RIGHT NOW FOO!
You. are an amazing writer. it's fabulous and i am jealous of your talent
Author's responseThank you very much!
Yeah, Gerard did kinda throw up some pretty bad things, didn't he?
I absolutely, one-hundred-per-cent agree with you; go make up with your brother! I may want that to happen, whether it will or not... well, that would just be telling.
Thank you so much; but I'm nothing to be jealous of, I just spend way too much time writing and not enough time on my homework! ;)
Thank you very much for taking the time to leave such a nice review, I really appreciate it! :)
(#) KobraBlaze 2011-11-30 03:05:48 PMWhat a cliffhanger!!! I can't wait for more. I actually always look forward to reading this story because they are the best I've ever seen! Hope you have a better day tomorrow. I had a crappy day too. Parent/Teacher meetings. Had some trouble with Irish. Anyway enough of my problems. This story is absolutely outstanding and I look forward to more! :)
Author's responseThank you very much; I'm glad that you liked it!
It's very uplifting that you look forward to reading this, even more uplifting and motivating that you said it!
Sorry to hear about your crappy day, I really do hope that things get better for you.
Thank you very much for taking the time to leave such a lovely review! :)
(#) SyraStrange 2011-12-02 04:42:32 PMI hate Gerard so much right now... It's only because I have a huge soft spot for Mikey. Not that I'm completely ignoring Gerard, I just got pissed for a second.
Don't ever stop updating. I'm scared it'll kill me...
Author's responseWho doesn't have a soft spot for Mikey? ;)
Don't worry, I'll keep updating; I don't want to be responsible for the death of a great reviewer! Thank you very much for taking the time to review! :)