"I guess it's a good thing I know CPR." Read, review, rate and feel my love :P
(#) youcanstakemyheart 2011-11-30 03:04:39 PMaw! it's so sad! gerard is such an idiot about it too! And frank's not even a rother and he knows what to do! I like this story though, keep up the superb writing. I too am hyper, although off of sparkling apple juice and oreos that are red with the blood of enemies! I'M EXCLAMATORY TODAY!:D
Author's responseThank you very much; I'm super-pleased that you liked it and took the time to review amidst your hyperness!
Sorry that it made you cry, I kinda feel bad now! Gerard is being a bit of an idiot, I totally get what you're saying there; he doesn't mean to be, though.
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review; I hope you enjoy your bloody oreos!! :)
(#) KobraBlaze 2011-11-30 03:28:57 PMThis story has tears running down my face. Not in a bad way though. It's just so emotional with Gerard leaving and the Frank left to help Mikey come out. I really can't wait for more.
Author's responsePlease don't cry; I kinda feel bad now for making you teary. I'll try to update tonight, but I've got an hour-long history essay to do, so whether I'll get a new chapter done remains to be seen.
Thank you very much for taking the time to review! :)
(#) tortillachip 2011-11-30 04:05:53 PMThere are so many things that I want to say about this. This was wonderful. I really like this line. " I wonder how much Gerard would give to have one weekend without having to be the responsible one." He never really had to be the responsible one, or at least it wouldn't seem like responsibility. A responsibility seems like something you HAVE to take care of or do, but you'd rather not. Like homework. "Because Gee isn’t evil, isn’t nasty and spiteful as his earlier words may lead some misinformed people to believe; he just tries too hard to be the perfection that he isn’t." This is why it seems like a responsibility. He's trying to be perfect. A perfect parent to a kid that's been broken down too many times to count, and he's wrapped up in his want, his need to be perfect that he's got no room to care for somebody else. Not even his brother. How dare Mikey want to spend some time with him like they used to? Nothing's like it used to be. They're both parentless and have their own problems and care for each other so much that they don't know how to deal with it. I'm not sure if this makes sense, and it seems like I'm missing a big part of what I mean, but I think the idea of Gerard putting Mikey aside in order to perfect himself came across so clearly and vividly. "I can’t look after Mikes without this job." That's what it shouldn't been. Looking after, not being his parent when all he needed was a brother. It seems like right now you can't even look after him at all with the way you've been acting.I can't wait until Gerard gets one of those real powerful realizations that he's not perfect and never will be. Can never come close, but being a good brother and friend should take care of that. I really like the way this chapter started. It was such a clever way to start it and that line made you wonder what you were talking about.
The line about the clothes made so much sense. It was like Mikey was letting the clothes swallow him, or he was drowning in them much like he was drowning in all that Gerard said and all that has happened to him in his life. I loved this so much. I loved everything about this from the way you wrote the first lines to the way you wrote the last lines and the lines in-between. This was beautifully wrote and well done. I love it.
Author's responseThank you soooo much for leaving such a long and detailed review; it really is extremely helpful!
I completely understand what you're saying and it is exactly what I was hoping to convey, so I'm glad that it made sense.
Thanks for saying that it was clever; although the plot for this is planned, I write the chapters as they come in one long laptop session so I'm never quite sure if they're any good or make any sense at all. With the first line I wanted to set the, I don't know, mood (?) of the chapter, so I hope that worked innsome way or another.
I wasn't too sure about the clothes-drowning-him thing; whether it actually made sense or if I sounded like some sort of nutter with an obsession about over-sized t-shirts, but I'm pleased that you think that it worked.
Thank you very much for taking the time to leave such a detailed and lovely review (as always). Thanks! :)
(#) tortillachip 2011-11-30 04:21:10 PMI'm my review the can't wasn't supposed to be there. Also, I wanted to say that I loved that Frank was disgusted at Gerard for even thinking of going to work at a time like that. And when Gerard was yelling that he was a retard, it really clearly showed that he was angry with himself. I also really liked the paragraph with these lines in it. "Steady footsteps. Steady silence." It was so very clever to write that way and the rest of the lines made me feel some kind of hope that Mikey would get out and talk to Frank. This was so beautiful.
Author's responseThank you very much for being so complimentary and for taking the time to leave another review; it's really made me smile! I'm extremely glad that you like it! Thanks for reviewing! :)
- sougya8okuhbvpih aww well done Frank. you are definitely one of my favourite writers, the description of feelings and thoughts is so amazing (:
Author's responseThank you very much; and yes, well done Frank! I'm very pleased and glad that you like it! Thank you sooo much for taking the time to review! :)
(#) SyraStrange 2011-12-02 04:53:18 PMSkittles!!! -runs to kitchen to try it-
No; that was not the most exciting thing I read out of that chapter. Your stories are like my drug of choice...
Author's responseHaha... Skittles. Now I'm hungry.
Thank you very much for taking the time to review! :)