You'll learn to love my gift.
- That was a powerful chapter. Very well written. There were a few mistakes here and there. In one place, you spelt 'luxurious' wrong. And just one or two grammatical errors. But otherwise, that chapter was very impacting. You hit your audience with the wonderful dialogue and setting. The entire atmosphere was beautiful and mysterious with a hint of lust. They were all controlled in some parts and exploding in the others. I am really impressed overall. Well done.
Author's responseThank you so much for your honesty. :D I fixed the spelling error and tried to change a few of the grammatical errors that I discovered. I'm not the best with grammar so I probably missed most of them, if not all. I'm working on it though so I do appreciate that you pointed out that there are errors.
Also, really glad you're enjoying the story so far.