- I likethe way that LeBlanc realizes her error in trying to capture the past over again and the impossibility of ever doing so. I like the way she even questions the old friendship and suddenly sees it as a friendship of mere necessity among some odd children.
I love the image of LeBlanc angrily pacing her room like caged tiger, kicking aside the trappings of her new identity.
I like the thought that with every subsequent meeting Nooj is less likely to remember LeBlanc as Talya. I find that interesting, it is something I hadn't considered about memory, but it seems believable.
I like the way that LeBlanc recognizes that Nooj is playing her false in order to get things from her.
I don't understand why LeBlanc herself behaves even more falsely in response even as she is revealing her true identity. I like the emotional charge you portray in the room and they way LeBlanc worries about fainting.
What I don't really like is the way that LeBlanc buckles under so swiftly to Nooj's anger. She could just as easily blame him for being falsely kind in order to extract spheres from her, since she seemed to notice it earlier.
I do like the way that LeBlanc will not promise to stop calling him by the nickname.
And see, I am sympathizing with poor Talya/LeBlanc because Nooj is being so ridiculously cold. He has no problem sucking up to someone he doesn't know for spheres, but somehow he hasto be cruel and nasty to an old friend who wants to renew his acquaintence.
"Don't worry, I plan keep my word and pass along any historical records I find." Add "to" after "plan."