Mikey and Fiona get an intrusion which Fiona's not too sure about. Mikey's worried about her but finds her in a position that scares him to death.
- OH MY GOD OH MY GOD
WHAT DID SHE DO
WHAT DID SHE DO
FLIPPING OUT NOW
SHE BETTER NOT HAVE DONE ANYTHING STUPID
OH MY GOD FLIPPING OUT NOW
Okay the writing in this was excellent. I particularly liked this part:
"As I walked down the large hallway nearing my room with each step I re-evaluated myself; I really needed to stop begin jealous of every man that came within touching distance of her. I placed the card key in waiting for the small light to turn green before turning the handle and opening the door.
It was quiet, almost deafening in silence as I stood in the mini hall of our room. I open the door to the bathroom to check if Fiona was there but she wasn’t. The hairs on my arms and the back of my neck stood straight as a cold breeze eerily brushed past.
Something in my gut told me something was wrong, my stomach flipped and squeezed as I mentally braced myself for what I would see next. Inching closer and closer to the corner my heart thumbed erratically in my ribcage a thin sheen of sweat covering my palms."
It was really great. And I seriously cannot WAIT for the next chapter.
You said you were angry/upset - I know loadsa people say this all the time and don't really mean it and you probably don't want to, but you can talk to me - you have my email address and I have a Blackberry so I'm more likely to answer quickly.
Hope you're okay, great chapter! :D
Author's responseYou're going to have to wait and see, I'll try to do an update that may or may not be massive before I go on holiday so you're not freaking out over this for 2 weeks.
I think my writing has improved because I've been reading actual books other than fanfiction and the combination of Watching QI. I'm sorry but waiting for it is the suspense that makes it even better when it finally arrives!
I'm fine now, I was really just angry at the Olympics, they have destroyed the world because David Tennant didn't do the last leg of the flame which was a fixed point in time so they've caused a crack in time....No wonder they say 2012 is when the world is supposed to end...Plus Muse did the OFFICIAL song for the Olympics and wasn't played once. I feel like I was slapped in the face by them but I didn't explain because it's kind of stupid saying you were angry because a fictional character didn't play a part in the Olympics :L
Aww Thank you so much :D
(#) eastjesusyourmom 2012-07-28 07:33:09 AM-fangirls everywhere-
This story seriously gives me heart attacks. Updaaaaaaate!!
Author's responseOh my god, why are you wasting your fangirliness on my story!
...I think you may need to stop reading my story or at least consult a doctor. I don't want "Died reading crappy fanfiction" on your grave stone and I don't think you'd want that either XD
Is this THE Gloria...the very famous Gloria that post notes on Ally's stories and always wants smut? Nice to finally meet you! :D If it isn't then just ignore what I said above. And thanks for reviewing my story...very little helps...oh god I sound like a supermarket advert! D:
(#) eastjesusyourmom 2012-07-29 03:46:32 AMHey, for some reason my review isn't showing up :(
EVERYTHING IS ALLY'S FAULT!!
Author's responseI still saw it so no need to worry or anything like that. It's either stupid ficwad's fault or the government...I'm going to say the government! Stupid government!
- I really hope that she's just broken Mikey's bass or something.
Yeah I finished the Perks of Being a Wallflower the other day and it inspired me a lot for Violet Hill :) and QI is amazing!
I'm actually really angry at that too. What the actual fuck was the opening ceremony about? XD and the ten foot Voldemort, oh God...
And yes, that is the Gloria. She has Ficwad now -sigh-
Author's responseI had such a temptation to tell you or give you a clue or something but nope I'm going to be cruel and say nothing except this explaining that I will say nothing.
Perks of Being a Wallflower seems really good, I haven't read it but I'd like to before the film comes out. Ooh Violet Hill-ness exciting! :D
Haha it was like 40ft wasn't it? HARRY YOU HAD ONE JOB! XD Dancing Abraham Lincolns made me laugh! They were just so damn into it! Oh Charlie you lovely person!
Well at least you can always be like: Hey...hey...rate my story up! Benefits!