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10- War

I saw a weakness beneath his strength and with growing horror I realized I was that weakness.

Category: Panic! At The Disco - Rating: R - Genres: Drama - Characters:  - Warnings: [V] - Published: 2012/09/10 - Updated: 2012/09/10 - 3752 words

Reviews

• Forever Yours

  (#) japulapu 2012-09-10 11:07:51 AM

  Well that was an interesting turn of events. There was one sentence that really got to me and that was the bit about her emotions and Brendon lighting them and how she felt. That was beautiful. I do however find it a bit far fetched that a war might be fought for her. But I guess in a world of vampires and werewolves, far fetched doesn't exist in the dictionary. And it also emphasises Brendon's love for her. But I found it slightly disconcerting that he called her 'his'. It sounds likes she's more of a possession than a human being. What appealed to me more than the content was the way this chapter is written. The language is very moving. I was really impressed.

  Author's response

  Thank you, I'm glad the language was moving. I was trying to make it as intense as I could given the situation.
  The war part is far fetched- that's more just their interpretation.
  What's more happening is werewolves will be unrestricted in their attacks towards humans with the treaty gone so it will be a lot of killing, since they haven't killed them for a long time. It's the vampires interference that will cause a bit of a war.
  
  Thanks so much for this review! It really does help me to hear your feedback.

• Forever Yours

  (#) Mirazal 2012-09-10 02:57:43 PM

  Still a better love story than Twilight

  Author's response

  Haha, well... I don't foresee her falling in love with a werewolf but great deduction. :P

• Forever Yours

  (#) Mirazal 2012-09-10 03:03:35 PM

  I couldn't resist saying that ^. Anyway, this is written so well. I've gotten sick of vampire romance, but this is just awesome and original. So please update. Because I gotta know what happens next. Gaaahhh SO MUCH PWNAGE

  Author's response

  It made me laugh a little. :P
  Thank you!
  I've gotten sick of them as well but I just love the idea so I had to try my hand at writing one, and this is going decently so I hope to finish it.
  I'll try to update soon. Hope to hear from you again.
  Haha.

• Forever Yours

  (#) Zeldafan 2012-09-12 12:34:24 PM

  I squealed so much when I saw you had updated, I block out everyone and everything and just sit there and read, its so amazing! I hope it never ends!!

  Author's response

  Aw lol that's really awesome. :) I'm glad you like it.
  I'll try to update soon.
  I have a lot planned for it but it depends on how well I can convey my ideas.

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