Frank is given an offer he can't refuse. Vampire Frerard Oneshot.
(#) killjoy_blackrose 2013-02-05okay i love the story. it's well written and everything, but the latin is...well i'm just a smartass. the latin's wrong. i'll use the last sentence as an example:
Mea videbo vos cum mortui...
mea is my. ego would be i, but normally you just
leave it out-videbo is enough, it already means 'i will see'
vos is second person plural. don't confuse this, it's the 'plural you'
cum with ablativ means with. it can also mean as, because and things similiar to that.
i'm not that good at latin so you're stuck with this half hearted correction-don't actually know if there's more. just...as an advice-if you want to use another language, know how to use it.
other than that i absolutely adore this. please don't feel offended by my smartass comment.
and i apologize for any spelling/grammar mistakes. i'm writing this on my ipod and it won't let me see my full comment unless i post it :/
i'm such a hypocrite...
Author's responseI asked my friend who is apparently a person who can speak latin which I now know is LIES!! And I may have to scream that at him when I see him I shall have to correct this now so thanks for pointing that out that could have been really embarrasing
Also thats so cool you can speak latin!! I can say like 3 words in german but there all swears lol
Thanks again xoxo
(#) killjoy_blackrose 2013-02-05i can't actually speak latin. more like analyse and translate it. can't form own sentences-we don't learn that because there really is no need for that xD
there are a few more mistakes for which i don't know the correct version so i just won't bother pointing them out (seriously i actually suck at latin even though it's one of my major courses...)
seriously though, latin's easier for germans, because we still have 5 cases and don't have the 'you' problem. 2.Ps.Sg: you=du 2.Ps.Pl: you=ihr
so yeah...i'm glad you're not offended :) i would've hated that...because the actual story is soooo good:)
you don't need anything but german swear words...it's a quite boring language.
uhhhhh i'm rambling...sorry xD
- You made me cry. Hard. The description here is truly beautiful. I was sucked in from the start. This is literally incredible, there's not enough praise that can be said for this! Are you intending to carry this on? And did you fix the Latin (out of interest)?
Author's responseI think I managed to fix it but I'm still not sure, I'm so glad you liked it! I intended this to be a one shot but I'm considering making it a chaptered fic, I'm not sure yet though. Thank you for reviewing! xoxo
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