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• Eroninja

  (#) minato 2014-05-30

  First,I am pretty sure fuka cant suck all of naruto's chakra in that short period of time and the way he was taken down by sora was kinda unrealistic since u portrayed him as someone who is mature,can read btw the lines,a good judge of character and smart,am pretty sure he wouldnt have fallen for a cheap tactic and to also trust an unknown shinobi he hasnt even known for less than a minute that he was able to leave his ungaurded back towards Sora.Anyways upload soon,coz I want to see how naruto gets out of these mess and plz plz plz,make the next chapter longer

• Eroninja

  (#) minato 2014-05-30

  First,I am pretty sure fuka cant suck all of naruto's chakra in that short period of time and the way he was taken down by sora was kinda unrealistic since u portrayed him as someone who is mature,can read btw the lines,a good judge of character and smart,am pretty sure he wouldnt have fallen for a cheap tactic and to also trust an unknown shinobi he hasnt even known for less than a minute that he was able to leave his ungaurded back towards Sora.Anyways upload soon,coz I want to see how naruto gets out of these mess and plz plz plz,make the next chapter longer

• Eroninja

  (#) minato 2014-05-30

  First,I am pretty sure fuka cant suck all of naruto's chakra in that short period of time and the way he was taken down by sora was kinda unrealistic since u portrayed him as someone who is mature,can read btw the lines,a good judge of character and smart,am pretty sure he wouldnt have fallen for a cheap tactic and to also trust an unknown shinobi he hasnt even known for less than a minute that he was able to leave his ungaurded back towards Sora.Anyways upload soon,coz I want to see how naruto gets out of these mess and plz plz plz,make the next chapter longer

• Eroninja

  (#) minato 2014-05-30

  First,I am pretty sure fuka cant suck all of naruto's chakra in that short period of time and the way he was taken down by sora was kinda unrealistic since u portrayed him as someone who is mature,can read btw the lines,a good judge of character and smart,am pretty sure he wouldnt have fallen for a cheap tactic and to also trust an unknown shinobi he hasnt even known for less than a minute that he was able to leave his ungaurded back towards Sora.Anyways upload soon,coz I want to see how naruto gets out of these mess and plz plz plz,make the next chapter longer

• Eroninja

  (#) ThaneOfTheCouch 2014-05-31

  I've been following this story for a while now, though this is the first time I've posted a review. This is definitely the most in depth and developed lemon fic I've ever read and I really enjoy it.
  
  I saw Sage's Corner post and I like the idea of bringing in fem. Orochimaru, it would seriously put Naruto's ability to reconcile his lovers' differences.
  
  As far as more ladies to bring in I would recommend the kunoichi from Basilisk for sure (I would like to see all of them but even just one would be nice) and Tenzin would make a great villian for any future arcs, if you really wanted to go crazy with it you could bring in some characters from Manyuu Hikenchou, you could change Chifusa's goal to easing the conflict between the nations and thus being a natural ally to Naruto.
  
  I would also suggest Rias Gremory or Souna Sitri from High School DxD and Azula from Atla (though that's not actually an anime) to be nobility since Naruto doesn't have much influence in those circles outside of Koyuki and now Haruna. Also, since the priestly class seems to be developing into a faction unto themselves you might consider Akeno Himejima (HSDxD) and Kikiyo from Inuyasha.
  
  Mikasa from AoT and Mikoto Kusanagi from GitS could be kunoichi from Iwa since its mountainous and they have a habit swinging around like spider-man and jumping off tall buildings respectively.

• Eroninja

  (#) fett29 2014-06-01

  I had completely forgotten about that Sora character. Don't even need to know how this arc ends to tell you that I already prefer your version of Sora's background to canon. I also very much like how you've taken a different route to explaining that while he may have Bijuu like abilities he does not hold, what was essentially, a duplicate Kyuubi. The explanation for that in canon was just dumb, super dumb.
  
  'We somehow used this inexplicable method to gather Kyuubi's 'biju gas' to make another Kyuubi.' Huh? I guess they added the biju gas to baby Sora's milk formula...
  
  Also very much thrilled to see the One King Movement make an appearance. I've never read any manga (and I ain't about to start) so I don't know for sure, but in the anime it was a very throw away topic. Frankly, it seemed like little more than the plot device for the Sora arc. I always thought there was more that could be done with the movement so I'm looking forward to seeing how you expand on it here.
  
  The ending struck me as a little rushed. I did like the idea of Naruto's capture but I wasn't too fond of its execution. I could easily believe that a canon Naruto would lower his guard around a stranger like Sora, but I had expected your improved version to be more cautious. Not to mention his ability to hirashin out of danger. Its a minor point, but I have to admit it did take a little something out of it for me.
  
  I did, however, love how Fuka seemed to take in too much of Naruto's chakra. That was after I looked her up to remember who the hell she even was. But now that I have, I eagerly await to see how that plays out.
  
  Overall, very good chapter. Can't wait for more.

• Eroninja

  (#) Frankenfran 2014-06-01

  @Minato: we understood the first time, there was no need to post three more times the same review

• Eroninja

  (#) Seed00 2014-06-02

  Cliffhanger. I was wondering when this would happen. You can't always have good things, and moments like these make the story interesting. So, Naruto is captured....yet again. His bijuu chakra will be drained...yet again. This is really engaging. This proves Naruto is not perfect; he's not super and there are still glaring holes that need to be fixed. Teamwork can defeat a superior opponent...(sometimes) along with a good plan.
  
  That scene at the end makes me think that's Naruto far afar into the future but for it to be an Iwa lover that kills him despite what he believes he achieved hurts a bit.Hopefully the next chapter elaborates more. I also understand what you meant for Kushina: one step forward, two steps back. And Fuka makes the mistake of absorbing his chakra directly: link start. THough I'm really sure this one will require work.
  
  Til next time

• Eroninja

  (#) Europefan01 2014-06-09

  For one thing mi amingo, I totally understood why Naruto taken down easily by an strategically tough opponent like Sora. In fact, this proves the theory of strong ninjas like him is normal, not godlike and eventually get caught before he expected.
  
  Besides, situations like this happens in missions from the military giving the meaning: POW-Prisoners Of War and MIA-Missing In Action. When things get really worse, KIA-Killed In Action. Same thing with the Police and FBI Forces. Like I said before in my last review, you made the entire NARUTO Series based on real life events that we humans encountered, endured and survived to make us better individuals. In other words, What doesn't kill you make you stronger right?
  
  Furthermore, some readers who review this current chapter really need to learn to use observation and analyzing methods to completely understand the story. In other words, Never jump into conclusions AFTER you find out the facts from a certain source.
  
  This all I got to say mi amingo, and keep up the excellent work. And still looking forward to the next chapter.
  
  Later.

• Eroninja

  (#) pokemaster12 2014-06-11

  I'm no sure how I feel about this chapter. The problem is I just can't see it happening. Your Naruto is by far stronger, more powerful, and much smarter then his counterpart. You had him prove as much when he was talking about Chiriku's motivation for not sharing everything he knew... and yet you then had him blow his previous words to the wind and made him act stupid again, which resulted in his getting caught.
  
  Now, I want it made clear. It's not that he was caught that bothers me, but how it happened. There's simply no way Naruto would have let this happen the way you'd made it happen. I was forced to suspend my reality of disbelief for this chapter, and even then I still failed and couldn't believe.

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