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Shopping Time! But Death Eaters are so impolite. WARNING: This chapter has scenes that some will find offensive.

Category: Harry Potter - Rating: R - Genres: Drama - Characters: Harry - Warnings: [!!] [V] - Published: 2014-08-07 - 12745 words

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(#) smeagol 2014-08-26

I just read the four chapters. Looks good so far with a qualification. Be a bit more careful now with your developing relationships with the new Harry with other people. Your descriptions of the new relationships with Remus and the goblins made sense because of the fast paced context that required it. You have established the New Harry as the Man of Action. Now it would be prudent to show more of his maturity and wisdom that he has acquired. Yes, you have started that already with your descriptive perceptions by Susan Bones. Stay Calm and Carry On...
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(#) jamescun 2014-09-01

plz write more
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(#) Ronnaug 2014-10-12

I like your writing. You have a very good story i think. Hope to see you write more.
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(#) Bronze 2015-08-22

Bobjones, I am requesting that you continue this story as it is such a good story line. It would be a shame to let it die unfinished. I find this Harry Potter to be much better then the usual.