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Destiny is Calling Me

by Cards 2 Reviews

Spot goes on one last job.

Category: Newsies - Rating: PG - Genres: Drama - Characters: Spot Conlon - Published: 2005/06/17 - Updated: 2005/06/17 - 431 words - Complete


  • Destiny is Calling Me

    (#) falco_conlon 2005-06-17 12:14:02 PM

    ooooh. Cards. I like it. Dark and angry and very Spot like. I always did like your Spot. The formating seems a little off but that's no big thing. I like ambiguity and I REALLY like the picture of an angry Spot with a gun. Nothing hotter than that. Awesome job ^_^
  • Destiny is Calling Me

    (#) studentnumber24601 2005-06-17 12:23:55 PM

    I really like this story. The imagery you used is very effective, and the little anecdote about the whore really sets a good tone to it. However, there were a few technical errors (a couple of words capitalized that shouldn't have been, and the dialogue at the very end isn't puncutated--it should have a comman and a lowercase 'h' on the 'he' after). But, aside from the technical things, this is a really interesting, unique story.

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