(#) shadphenix 2006-09-12First of all, I liked it. Only a couple of points, I thought you might consider. While it would be fitting for Tia to speak French, she never does in the movie, so I doubt she'd speak so much of it otherwise, though it is an interesting take. Also, I find it just a tad strange that Elizabeth would be able to identify a type of tobacco. I think she might recognize there was something oriental about the taste. There are possibilities of her being familiar, though; perhaps you could explain? I know you have some leeway with a dream, but at the same time, you don't want to rely too heavily on it.
I really liked this piece. A favorite moment was when she awoke and the leaves whisper something like, 'You could have had him forever if only you'd reached out your hand.' That was pretty powerful. Overall, a good piece and a different take on her feelings of guilt. Looking forward to your future work.
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