- Wow, this realy gets to to reader. The scene at the MoM is detailed and yet vague enough to let it stand as it is or to expand it later as recap or flashback, really exemplary. Little Harry's entry into the world of wonders (an own bed, all you can eat, and last but not least magic) takes good care of world-sight and the priorities of an five-year-old.
Will 'Uncle Harry' also save others beyond Sirius, maybe Lunas mother?
It's up to you to continue or not, but I hope You will write more.
(#) janeaverage 2007-04-08I adore this beginning. I have a few quibbles, though. Harry's not been raped, he's hungry, so I think you're looking for "famished" rather than "ravished." Also, seems a little odd for Harry and Dudley to be in high chairs and so easygoing and non-vocal. You've written them a lot younger than five, it seems.
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