- have you got this posted somewhere else. i have read it before, i loved it then, and i still do. I think you lost it after a bit, trying to add to many thinks to it. towards the end with the mysterious Island and the shadow animals (of whatever) it didn't make sense and was tooo far out there. i would have just like the shadow brother (i think there were) to continue taking down Voldemorts people, and then find whatever they needed with Dean. But the Island think just got confussing and out of hand. I hope you decide to change the story a bit later on. i would really love to see a different line followed when we get to that that Dean's dad past thing. cheers, hope to hear a reply...
- An interesting variation on a standard theme. Harry's early emancipation brings a welcome twist. I liked how you handled the obligatory shopping spree. Thank you for not having him pay the equivalent of sixty or seventy thousand dollars on a few suits and a handfull of other clothing. It never ceases to amaze me when a writer converts Galleons to Pounds, and then throws it all out by having him buy things at about three thousand percent more than they should cost.
OK, That said, The attack in Diagon Alley is well done and shows a level of both ferocity and physical fitness in the DE's that is normally not seen. I have placed this on my alerts list, and eagerly await the next page. Alorkin
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