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Ballad of a Broken Girl

Sometimes you have to accept that people will not come back into your life. Written for my mom.

Category: Poetry - Rating: R - Genres: Angst - Characters:  - Published: 2006/10/17 - Updated: 2006/10/17 - 326 words - Complete

Reviews

• Ballad of a Broken Girl

  (#) Orual 2006-10-17 06:41:36 PM

  You did a great job with the progression in this poem, your narrator sounded like a real person trying to convince herself that the call would come. You truly conveyed desperation, which is rare.
  
  It seemed like your narrator regressed too completely at the end, though. I can definitely understand the regression and the lack of a desire to get better, but I pictured the narrator in some sort of live-in rehab. She wouldn't have access to all those drugs if she were a patient. Perhaps she could waste away, but heroin, meth, and concaine just seemed like too much.

• Ballad of a Broken Girl

  (#) Sing2009 2006-10-21 04:34:27 PM

  OMG! that was really good! i really enjoyed you got your emotions across really well also! Keep it up! PEACE!

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