- I found the Malthus Bern pamphlets a very interesting device and one that I've not seen before. The fact that they pre-date Voldemort was a nice touch. I wonder if he read them as a student and incorporated several of his ideas into his world view.
This is a very good and interesting read. Thanks for sharing.
Author's responseI've had elements of the ideas before (attributed to Grindelwald and earlier thinkers), but this is a different twist. And yes, Riddle knew this writer well, and twisted it for his own purposes.
If it helps anyone, Bern=Marx, Grindelwald=Kautsky and later Lenin, Voldemort=Stalin, while Harry is creating the idea of the Social Democrats.
If that confuses everyone, sorry.
- Frankly, this is one of your worst stories. You're a very good worldbuilder, but you're not very good at writing romantic relationships.
Hermione, in the books, is a perfectly normal girl. She is probably more intelligent than most people her age, but still normal. You have, using the excuse that she is Harry's soul mate/one true love, turned her into the most beautiful/intelligent woman in the world, a perfect goddess that can do no wrong. In other words, you've turned her into a Mary Sue. The Heir-Of-Everything/Superpowered Harry is also a bit of a Gary-Stu, but he was much more bearable than Hermione. The relationship between them was very forced. I think the fic would have been better if you kept the Harry/Hermione romance to the side.
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