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Devil's Eyes

This is kind of a creepy poem I wrote for school. I got a good mark on it so I hope you like it as much as my teacher did. Basically it's about death and hell.

Category: Poetry - Rating: PG - Genres: Angst, Horror - Characters:  - Published: 2006/10/24 - Updated: 2006/10/25 - 147 words - Complete

Reviews

• Devil's Eyes

  (#) darks00 2006-10-26 07:53:14 AM

  Sorry that I have to give a short reiview, but I'm at school ;)
  
  Very good. I can see why you got a good mark. (raites aimbance)
  
  xxDarkness' Kidxx

• Devil's Eyes

  (#) MarkPoa 2007-02-16 11:52:31 PM

  There was a very good picture that was drawn by your poem. I could imagine the scene quite vividly.
  
  Though personally, I felt the sense of suspense, fear and dread seemed to be cut short everytime the stanza ends. Maybe longer stanzas would be a better format for something like this? The best example I could remember was Poe's The Raven, which had longer stanzas and hence managed to sustain the momentum of the fear and feeling of suspense.

  Author's response

  At first I disagreed with you but after I read it again it makes sence. I'm not going to change it though because like I said I wrote it for school and I just wanted to show a sample of my writing. I feel honored that I was even remotely compaired to Poe. Thank you.

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