Things are about to get a little complicated...
(#) whatkatydid 2006-11-20 12:13:56 AMI love break through chapters, this was one of them, Pete finally giving in and allowing her to help.
I especially enjoyed the diner seen, the ambiance was perfect. Then when he let her read the stuff he'd been writing, that was just perfect.
I'm also in love with the narrative aspect of the story and witty comments thrown in, it makes for a great read.
Thanks for updating - I'm been super nice today and it's monday morning. I should be telling everyone how much everyone and everything sucks. I'm so emo it's dispicable.
Author's responseI must say, I so enjoy your reviews. They are such an ego boost and you're specific about what you like. I'd hate to see what would happen if you didn't like a chapter.
And congrats on being nice...on a Monday morning, no less. If this was myspace, I'd definitely give you two kudos.
(#) howshesews 2006-11-20 06:43:51 AMuh, brilliant. i'm not even kidding. i love Pete. he's more complicated in this story than i've ever seen in any other story, and that, my friend, takes skill.
way to fucking go. i love this i can't wait for more.
p.s. sprry i've reviewed so late in the game. i just got around to reading, by reccomendation , and i'm way impressed.
Author's responseThat totally made my day, as sad as that sounds. Don't fret, he'll get plenty more complicated as the story progresses. Thanks for reviewing :)
(#) pixied_secrets 2006-11-20 05:06:34 PMso, i'm like the fifth reviewer this time. there is a reasonable explanation, but it's a long story that i can't cut short so i'm just going to hope that in the spirit of the DoJ you can forgive me. but hey, i still beat alex. i think.
anyway, a nice list from me to you:
1.) thank your for the non-MCR reference. i'm not a big fan of them (hate mail can be sent to me via my contact button on my profile. i'll argue the atrociousness of MCR and Hawthorne Heights to the death)
2.)/After probably the most awkward car ride of my life, save for the time Joe drove me to a clinic to purchase birth control so I could have consequence-free relations with his best friend. / haha. i could almost picture the awkward atmosphere. i love it.
3.)/I, the poor hairdresser-not the almost famous, epically tragic Emo God-paid the bill. / i don't know if you meant to or not, but that alluded to Pete's carelessness with life. at least it did to me. i dunno, i tend to read into things too much.
4.) usually i'm not a big fan of the "this is how these lyrics came about" because it's usually just overdone and cheesy, but this was so well written, and the song pertains to the situation so well that i could only be in awe at it.
5.) i think it's realistic that she wasn't hesitant to let Pete kiss her, and it can be accredited to the past they share.
also, if you don't feel like you can write smut then don't. i love your story even without secks. how fucked up is that?
Author's responseOf course I forgive your tardiness in honor of the DoJ...and because we agree that MCR is terrible and their CDs should replace toilet paper. OK, maybe not, but I'm sure you can appreciate the analogy I was shooting for.
Did I mention I heart your reviews? For serious. They always put a smile on my face. And I get the feeling that if you didn't like a chapter, you'd definitely rip into me, which is a good thing.
- So, let me just tell you that I am hooked to this story.
You paint a vivid picture with your words, and that is great writing. Keep up the good work. I can't wait to see what happens.
Author's responseThank you, CeCe. The next couple of chapters should get pretty interesting. Expect a huge character shift.