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La Timinia
(#) darks00 2006-11-24
Could I please say one thing? Please do not give away what's going to happen in the chapter title. The key point of this chapter is Usha's betrayal, am I correct? The title gave that away. Please call it something different so that it's a shock, so they don't expect it BEFORE it happens. You got us all wondering if she's going to betray him or something. Please don't give it away in the title.
Don't get me wrong, I LOVE this chapter, and I LOVE this story. Just a little advice. I feel so sorry for Julius. Good thing that the cliff didn't magicly appear ;) just remember I wasn't trying to be mean. I love your stories, just a little advice.
Woah, long review. To end it, I think I'll rate it "Exciting." Please update soon!
xxDarkness' KidxxLa Timinia
(#) Trinda 2006-11-24
I have to agree with Darks up there, the title did give it. Honestly, not one of your better chapters but maybe because I thought that Usha wastrustworthy... Usha reminds me of the name Ursula WAYY too much. Lol.
Can't wait for Julius's next step, loved the a/n about the cliff. LOL!
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