Pete's a wreck since his girlfriend is gone. (one shot)
(#) rawrlittledino 2006-11-28 11:31:50 PMThat was amazing.
It actually makes my one-shots look like dirt. Like, seriously.
You can really picture his emotions, and it really gets you in depth with the story without explaining a lot. Well done. Uses rating point =]
Author's responseThank you for such a great comment. I really didn't think that this was very good, it was just because I was feeling like crap one day after school. You have made my day happier. :)
That was Truly moving. It changed so much. At first I thought they had only broken up. Then when I found out she died (Shocker number one) I thought she was ill. Then It turned around again and you find out she killed herself. (Shocker number two) I was like Wait what!?
It was a very well written story, I could really feel the saddness of Pete and everyone else. You created the mood perfectly...
-Rates her story as moving-
Keep writting, your talented I've read another one of your storys before, and I havent been let down yet.
Author's responsei think you're like the nicest person in the world. my writing is total crap. but thank you anyway :) you made my day