You knew another meeting was inevitable.
(#) whatkatydid 2006-12-05 12:54:07 AMGah!!! It's AWESOME!!!! I cannot speak. I might. Resort. To my. Disjointed. Sentences. I. Can't. Stop!!.
I'm so happy!!!
This was brillant - you said Patrick was Cherubic. That's just ....just perfect.
Author's responseperforms CPR
When I think of Patrick, I think of cherubs...I just help it.
(#) FrostedGlass 2006-12-05 08:23:02 AMDamn it! Katy is even the first European on here.
The "toro! toro! thing was classy. Ha. ;)
Well, Charlie surely feels very comfortable with Patrick around. That's awesome. They should be going at it in the next chapter... ;)
Patrick being modest is... Patrick being not Pete. I love it.
R to da point.
Author's responseNo, no, there won't be any "going at it"...at least not anytime soon, you perv.
(#) pixied_secrets 2006-12-05 05:50:08 PMso we finally got to learn how matt died. poor guy. it's also good to know that it was a shotgun marriage. not the typical "i love you soooo much, let's get married and spend eternity together" type of thing. makes it a little more believable that she's able to get over him.
i think this chapter was pretty successful in portraying charlies life, and how she ended up where she is. i love it.
it surprised me with how calmly patrick handled her situation. i think that's probably realistic, and thank you for making it not so over-dramatic. that's refreshing.
the ambiance in this chapter made me hungry for baked goods. damn you.
Author's responseI'm not one for drama, though I'm sure I'll incorporate some later on. She's not quite over Matt yet, that will also become an issue in time. And I thought a bakery would be a nice touch, considering most heroines are in bands or work at some record store or something. I was going for a more "everyday" kind of character...beside, my uncle just opened a sweet bakery...mmmdanish.
(#) luckysgc921 2006-12-06 10:06:29 AMthis is really a brilliant story so far, you should definitly keep it up.
I adored the last line: "we're alright. it pays the rent." ha!
Charlie seems like a wonderful character, and so much different then any other OC in these types of stories. Its nice to read about someone who isn't 19 and perfect. :)
Author's responseThaaaank you. I wasn't sure how this story would be received, but I'm relieved it's going over well. I noticed a huge amount of stories involving young "Mary Sue" kind of girls-I'm guilty of it too-and I wanted to do something a little different. Glad you like it.
- Alright. Lately songs come into my head when I read these fics, so here's one that comes to my mind when I read this one.
And cheers to you Mrs. Robinson. Jesus loves you more than you will know. Whoa Whoa Whoa!
This is a very worth review, but it's all I gots.