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Dear Dad

by RenoTurk 2 Reviews

Rated for language really. Reno sends one last message to his father...

Category: Final Fantasy 7 - Rating: R - Genres: Angst - Characters: Reno - Warnings: [!] - Published: 2006/12/06 - Updated: 2006/12/06 - 795 words - Complete

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  • Dear Dad

    (#) IWCT 2006-12-16 09:10:36 PM

    Wow, really insightful., I love that bitter, yet triumphant tone that you managed to get. It really captured the devil-may-care "you screwed with my life, and now I'm going to fuck up yours" tone that is oh-so-appropriate in this situation.

    The only area of improvement that I could suggest would be finding a beta. Was that a letter, though, or an internal monologue? If it was a letter, then the confused lack of punctuation makes a lot more sense, and is totally in character for Reno. It was a little confusing in the beginning, though, and that's why I'd suggest a beta.

    The point being: play to your strengths, and yours is obviously an amazing grasp of characterization, and tone. Absolute wow, it totally bowled me over.

    Author's response

    Thanks very much and yeah it was a drabble letter. I was guessing maybe Reno scribbled it after he heard his orders. He was intent on that one last message to a man he could never properly confront. His way of putting his demons to bed..
  • Dear Dad

    (#) RubyBlight 2009-08-19 02:20:03 PM

    This was wonderful. Very intense.

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