- Wow, really insightful., I love that bitter, yet triumphant tone that you managed to get. It really captured the devil-may-care "you screwed with my life, and now I'm going to fuck up yours" tone that is oh-so-appropriate in this situation.
The only area of improvement that I could suggest would be finding a beta. Was that a letter, though, or an internal monologue? If it was a letter, then the confused lack of punctuation makes a lot more sense, and is totally in character for Reno. It was a little confusing in the beginning, though, and that's why I'd suggest a beta.
The point being: play to your strengths, and yours is obviously an amazing grasp of characterization, and tone. Absolute wow, it totally bowled me over.
Author's responseThanks very much and yeah it was a drabble letter. I was guessing maybe Reno scribbled it after he heard his orders. He was intent on that one last message to a man he could never properly confront. His way of putting his demons to bed..
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