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Back With A Vengeance
2 reviews20 years after Naraku's death, Hakudoshi returns to exact revenge upon those who detroyed him...the Inu Tachi.
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Back With A Vengeance
(#) darkener14 2006-12-09
I like the beginning, but there are some things that bother me. For instance, you shouldn't have to tell us that Hakudoushi is reminising. Put in more detail about what caused him to reminisce about twenty years ago. Where he was at when he suddenly remember his promise to himself to kill the Inu-tachi. Things like that. Those few things should give you a longer chapter.Author's response
thank you for that. i was thinking about that all weekend and i thought of some new things for it. ~til then~
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(#) nickey18 2006-12-11
your story suck yea um thats right also so jamey said if ur going to make a story at least make it to paragraphs
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