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Falling

you may have seen this before under another name... check out any of the following profiles for why; paua_dragon, water_dragon or white_pirate a poem about a 13 yr old with depression

Category: Poetry - Rating: G - Genres: Angst - Characters:  - Published: 2006/12/09 - Updated: 2006/12/10 - 536 words - Complete

Reviews

• Falling

  (#) MarkPoa 2007-02-02 05:55:55 PM

  I'm going to review the poem on its own, cause there's really no commenting Psalms. :P Two things that I didn't feel good about this poem: the combination of "falling" and "high low" within a span of two lines from each other made things a bit confusing image-wise and the ending two lines seemed out of place. I wonder if you could symbolize or express the final thought in a more descriptive or poetic manner than a piece of whispered dialogue. Just a suggestion.
  
  However, I loved how you were able to use repetition to give the poem its mood, particularly in the second half of the poem. The repetition really made the poem read a whole lot better.

• Falling

  (#) friday13th 2012-05-04 09:00:51 PM

  even know i recently turned my back on god , i like how you added the last part to your poem and the poem was great

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