- Well i for one loved it! Some beautiful description in there.
"soft organ music bounced off of every corner displaying the beautiful acoustics of the room" Really good.
Just shows that you dont have to involve another character to create a brilliant piece of work. Loved it! Thanks for taking part in the challenge!XX
Author's responseyea...I tend to write kinda "flowery". I like descriptive terms. My creative writing professor before I graduated used to yell at me all the time for it and tell me it was going to "cheapen my words". So I'm glad you liked it.
(#) GwenMerlon 2006-12-20I am so impressed with this piece! I love how you made Pete so good- most write him as a badass, but you pull off a 'good Pete' wonderfully. I also like the fact that you made this soley about Christmas and not a romantic interest. Great job!
Author's responsethanks so much for your kind words. :) I kinda can't stand pete--its actually a running joke with my friends who know I like FOB, so for me to write him as anything other then self obsessed and obnoxious was a challenge that I wanted to give myself. :)
- I knew I liked you for a reason. Quite a nice story. I really like your writing style and the way you described everything. Though, I'm surprised you didn't kill Pete. :)
Author's responselol. that's exactly what my friend said when she read it. Just 'cause I don't like the boy doesn't mean I wish him dead. thanks for the kind words. I like you too. lol
(#) FrostedGlass 2006-12-21AMBIANCE!
I loved it. And that should mean a lot because I am far from being religious myself.
This is totally Christmas spirit. (Sorry I mess up a compliment with something like "totally".) I'm awestruck. Just beautiful.
Thank you so much for this, Bridget.
You did a great job getting into the mind of Pete. I often find myself especially not attracted to him but you gotta admit, there is something about him. The way he always appears so self-confident, you just KNOW he's hiding so much from the world. (As it is everybody's right to do so.) And I think you captured that perfectly in your one-shot.
:) Happy Holidays and all that mumbo-jumbo to you. ;)
It's a fav.
Author's responseyes Pete definitly has "something". Notice both stories I've posted have featured him.
I always say the reason I don't like him very much is that I think if I ever met him I'd be incredibly attracted to his personality as he sorta reminds me of all my exboyfriends tied up into one--and that's not a good thing (as I'm always attracted to incredibly egotistical men).
Thanks for the sweet review! :) I was shooting for a "christmas" vibe as opposed to a "fall out boy" vibe. The challenge just presented itself in the fall out boy section.
- Really beautiful, and you captured the REAL spirit of Christmas. Thanks for reminding me. This just screams ambiance. So have a point, you deserve it :-)
Author's responseoooo! my very own point! dances thank you so much. i will cherish it always and name it bob.
I'm glad everyone got the real spirit of christmas and the beauty of the holidays that I was going for. In my house we tend to stay away from the commercialization of it so whenever I see people stressing over 'what to buy' I just don't "get it" (so to speak) so I tried to portray my view of things in this story with Pete as my conduit. :)
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