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Chapter five

by wimvincken 1 Reviews

It does not go well with Harry Potter. In order to increase Harry's magical power, Dumbledore infects Harry and two girls with a disease. And his power surges.

Category: Harry Potter - Rating: PG-13 - Genres: Action/Adventure, Romance - Characters: Dumbledore, Ginny, Harry, Hermione, Lupin, Molly Weasley, Professor McGonagall, Ron, Sirius, Snape, Tom Riddle, Voldemort - Warnings: [X] [Y] - Published: 2007/01/02 - Updated: 2007/01/02 - 3096 words

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  • Magical triplet

    (#) Geovanni_Luciano 2007-01-02 10:13:35 PM

    In reading your story, I have to say this. You're too proper. It very formal and comes across as such You're writing a story about teenagers, and while you're writing about british teens, at that, they are still just that. It almost comes across as if english isn't your primary language, and while that may come across as an insult, it isn't meant to me. You write well. But if you're going to be writing about teens, write something plain and to the point. Even if they're brilliant teens at that, they still talk as such. I like you story, and like many others, I would suspect, I'm skipping to the Yahoo group to check the rest of the story out. SMILES!

    Author's response

    Thanks.

    The story was written originally many years ago. This was truly my first story I have ever written. (at school I copied from others, oops)
    (as you for sure notice, I was always bad with languages. I speak six languages, none of them in perfection. But I am good in math? (grin))

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