Rufus Scrimgeour reflects on his conversation with Harry, and receives an unexpected visitor with an unwarranted demand. Character-centic one-shot.
(#) Ariel_Tempest 2005-08-19 06:41:00 PMFirst off: Thank you for writing this. Nice to see people playing with the monrs. Secondly: I'm adding you to my favorites. Just so you know.
Okay, since you specifically asked about your take on the character, over all I liked it. The more childish aspects - the foot stamping especially - didn't quite ring true to me, but we all have our own perceptions of the characters. His lack of composition at the end also seemed a touch off, but I can't figure out why there...everything flows logically, given what you're doing and how you're presenting him, so it's hard to put a finger on it.
The bit about his pacing and his mother pacing? Bloody brilliant. I was also very fond of his view on politics and you did VERY well bringing the Muggle PM into at the end. His interaction with Percy was telling and did a good job of showing a "softer" side than the book did (softer, yes, but still controlled).
All in all it's a very well done piece and there's nothing I'd actively want you to change.
(#) Ky 2005-08-23 06:23:53 PMThere's really not much I can say, as your first reviewer pretty much said it all. XD
You're writing style is lovely and smooth, it seems like it flows in a natural way. Some of his thoughts stringing together nicely, and then something else jumps in.
The stamping of the foot and how poleaxed he was about the British Minister didn't sit quite well with me, but I do actually like that. He still has the dreams of childhood and it seems that he's in over his head. It's just awesome.
Also, good points on the politics! It was brilliant, I can't wait to see more from you.